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Some people say that every human being con create the art (e.9.paining), others think only the people born with the ability can create art. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The
ability
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 to create the
art
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 has been a subject of many debates. There are people who believe artistic
ability
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 is not specific to certain individuals. Others,
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, think it is hereditary or innate. In my opinion, every human being is born with a distinct
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talent but
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talent, but
 not everyone is able to demonstrate an artistic work.
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 essay intends to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
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 both sides of the argument before a conclusion is reached. The aesthetic sense is part of human quality that gives every individual the potential to create the
art
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. But, creativity doesn’t grow naturally into
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person
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a person
people
the person
. To produce an artistic work, a
person
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 needs so much practice and experience to express that hidden flair.
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, a composer requires a thorough set of listening skills to develop internal mental processing. In
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the long run
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 inner hearing
can leads
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can lead
 to better understanding of rhythmic structure.
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, an artistic
ability
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 requires imagination and the skill to draw or compose music. A
person
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 can master the techniques and the skills of the
art
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 to their fullest potential.
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, He may not have the same creative imagination of the
person
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 who is exceptionally talented.
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, the production of artworks requires dedication or a lot of hard work and the natural gift.
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, scientific
evidences
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evidence
 have proved the
ability
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 that we inherit from our parents plays a decisive role in determining our aptitude. To illustrate, many great artists showed prodigious
ability
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 from an early age like Mozart, who was a great classical composer and musician, compose from the age of five and perform before the high ranking officials of his society. Another example, Homayon Shajarian, the most well-known Persian classical singer whose euphonious voice is supernatural, was born in a
music
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musically
 dedicated family.
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, the genetic influence of an individual can’t be ignored as it gives a
person
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 a certain
ability
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 that may not exist within all people the same. A
person
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 with a particular
talent
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 see things
different
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differently
 from the way regular people do. To me, people are born to display different talents across different domains which very much depend on genetic influence. If a
person
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 is good at something, it doesn’t mean he can be good at everything. Even in the classroom, a student may have
natural
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a natural ability
natural abilities
ability
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 in math but he may not show the same
talent
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 for
art
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.
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, people who are born in families having an exceptional
talent
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 in a
specefic
(sometimes followed by 'to') applying to or characterized by or distinguishing something particular or special or unique
specific
 domain are more likely to be intelligent in that area. In conclusion, the significant role of genetic inheritance in generating high level of artistic
ability
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 is irrefutable. Practice can help the
person
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 at
lower level but
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lower levels, but
lower levels but
a lower level but
the lower level but
 it is ineffective at
higher level
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higher levels
.
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