Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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Crime rate
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The crime rate
has risen steadily over the past few years and the phenomenon can be observed around the world.
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essay will discuss the possible reasons and
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delve into the acceptable solutions to curb crime rate. One of the major reasons for
increase
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an increase
the increase
in criminal activity can be directly linked to lack of educational facilities for the lower strata of the
society
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. Due to
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, it has been observed over the past few years that, with the development of economies around the world, pay difference between the upper and the lower segment of the
society
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has increased dramatically.
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results in a feeling of
unjustice
an unjust act
injustice
among the lower segment of the
society
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, which pushes these people to cause disruption in
society
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.
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, it has been observed that
eventhough
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even though
the majority of the crimes happen in metro cities, the culprits are normally found living in slums, which do not have proper schools or universities. The possible solution to the problem stated above can be better educational facilities. The government should reserve seats for the
underpreviledge
lacking the rights and advantages of other members of society
underprivileged
in the state universities and colleges.
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, professors not being able to find jobs can be asked to take lectures during evenings in state universities, which will be especially for the lower class.
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would help in increasing penetration of
eduction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
and encourage them to pursue corporate jobs and not be pushed towards crime. To sum up, I believe providing better
eduation
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
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to the lower strata of the
society
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can really help in developing
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segment and
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help in curbing the rising rate of crime.
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