Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behavior and protect them from danger.However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom.To what extend do you agree or disagree

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It is well said that parents are the

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teachers of their children.They want to shape the future of their children in

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a way so that they do not fail later in life,

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make many strict rules and regulations for them.

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to that, teachers

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impose lots of

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in framing the personality and career of their students and transform them into a well-behaved social person.I personally believe that there should not be many limitations on children, as they can get profit from fewer rules only. Some people argue that parents and teachers should show more strictness towards youngsters.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

102 words

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Parents and teachers make many rules for children to encourage good behavior and protect them from danger.However, children would benefit from fewer rules and greater freedom.To what extend do you agree or disagree

Include an introduction and conclusion

Today many children and teenagers are overweight and unhealthy. Give reasons to explain why many young people are obese and give some solutions to fix the problem.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can case serious social problems, as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with thia statement?

The government should control the amount of violence in films and on the television in order to decrease the level of violent crime in the society. To what extent you agree or disagree?

It is a common aspiration among people to run their own business, rather that work for an employer. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?