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Some people believe that the problem of illegal drugs can be solved by just legalizing all drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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Problem
Suggestion
The problem
 of drug usage has become prevalent in less than no time all over the world. In most parts of the world, drugs are not legalised yet people are consuming them one way or another. So, should drugs be legalised? Some people would agree to
this
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 while others would make conflict
on
Suggestion
in
 that. I totally disagree
to
Suggestion
with
 the statement that
problem
Suggestion
the problem
 of illegal drugs can be resolved by legalising them. Let us assume that all drugs has been legalised and now everyone can take drugs anytime anywhere.
This
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 would create so much misery in the society that no one could imagine.
Youth
Suggestion
A youth
 who has not been educated about
pros
Suggestion
the pros
 and cons of consuming drugs will be most influenced by it. Making drugs legal overnight would not bring any solution to on-going issues rather it will escalate the troubles.
This
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 has to be done in a specific manner. Before legalising any drugs,
government
Suggestion
the government
 must take care of
education part
Suggestion
the education part
 of it.
In addition
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 to that, youth must be aware about
consequences
Suggestion
the consequences
 of
overdose
Accept comma addition
overdose, otherwise
otherwise
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this
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 decision would be devastating for young generation. It would be impossible to control the usage once it becomes legal. In
recent survey
Suggestion
a recent survey
 done in Australia, it was found that 80 percent illegal drugs are taken by youth of age 15-28 while only 20 percent of other ages are involved. To conclude, I would say that in spite of making all drugs legal, a nation must focus on its education part by which people will be aware about
disadvantages
Suggestion
the disadvantages
 of having drugs.
Thus
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, I totally condemn the idea of legalising all drugs.
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