The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourages people from doing activities which usually involve very little risk. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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think the

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should reduce the amount of bad

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because it deters many

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from engaging in activities.

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, other

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disagree with that idea, because bad

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makes

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vigilant of their surroundings, and pay attention to things that happen in different regions. It is good if

people

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are mindful before doing something and concerned about some events in other places. From my point of view, I am partially in

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of the thought that the

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are responsible for the input of bad

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and

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some negative information moderately. Some

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are opposed to deleting some bad

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due to

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the necessity.

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, some

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who intend to travel abroad can learn about the

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about their destinations through the

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people

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could prepare for the contingencies that events may bring about.

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, negative information can make

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take stock of potential risks they face and eventually decisions.

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, those bad

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can be regarded as educational functions to some degree.

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, the occurrences,

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causes of carbon dioxide intoxication, have been transmitted by various

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, whereby viewers or listeners can learn a lesson and

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, prevent

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type of tragedy.

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, other

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suggest children or unmatured-mind

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receive too much negative transmission from the

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, some

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exaggerate incidents as more sensational and shocking than original facts and the overblown narration by the anchor will horrify some

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, the

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regularly relates a variety of negative

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about societal issues,

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as car accidents or traffic disputes, which may bring about pernicious effects on

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who have not learn driving yet, like some of them would not even dare to attempt taking up

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stuff after watching plenty of accidents from the television. In conclusion, as they say, “Too much is as bad as too little”. We should acquire bad

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, but at the same time, I think the

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should pay attention to the minority of

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's benefits and restrict the amount of bad

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to some extent, given to the public in case those exaggerated concerns could mislead

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, it may restrain

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's possibilities.

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While your introduction sets up the argument and presents your stance, it can be further refined to present a clearer thesis statement. For instance, ensure that your main argument is more succinctly stated.

coherence cohesion

Your essay can benefit from more varied sentence structures and more advanced vocabulary. This will help in conveying your ideas more effectively.

task achievement

Your essay addresses the prompt effectively, presenting both sides of the argument and including relevant examples.

coherence cohesion

The essay is well-organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion.

task achievement

You provide specific examples to support your points, such as the impact of media on travel decisions and learning from negative news about carbon dioxide intoxication.

coherence cohesion

The conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and restates your stance clearly.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

369 words

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