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In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that in countries which are suffering from high rates of unemployment, it seems hardly worthwhile to offer
education
 beyond primary
level
 to most pupils. While I accept that
this
 appears logical, I believe that
this
 is a very narrow perspective, and I completely disagree with the statement.
Firstly
, the prediction of upturns and downturns in the job market is extremely difficult. At one period there may be a demand for workers in many sectors of a country’s economy. Wages are high, and the
education
 system needs to prepare large numbers of students up to and beyond secondary school
level
, with the skills to meet the needs of employers.
For example
, while technology is replacing many traditional jobs in
such
 areas as agriculture, transport and heavy industry, it is
also
 creating new jobs in other sectors.
Thus
, in economic terms, it is almost impossible to say how many highly-educated young people will be required for a nation’s workforce.
Secondly
, I contend that the purpose of
education
 is much more fundamental than simply to prepare young people for the world of work.
Education
 is nothing less than the acquisition of lifelong skills in thinking critically about all aspects of life. At its best, secondary
education
 plays an essential part of helping young people to develop these critical skills. If the citizens of a country are informed and enlightened, problems
such
 as a welfare system or the distribution of wealth can be intelligently debated. Without mass
education
 to
this
level
, a country can have no responsible citizens. In conclusion,
although
 in today’s volatile global economy, any country’s employment situation is subject to rapid changes, the intangible but real objectives of
education
 dictate that young people should be educated to at least secondary
level
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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