In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that in countries which are suffering from high rates of unemployment, it seems hardly worthwhile to offer
education
beyond primary
level
to most pupils. While I accept that
this
appears logical, I believe that
this
is a very narrow perspective, and I completely disagree with the statement.
Firstly
, the prediction of upturns and downturns in the job market is extremely difficult. At one period there may be a demand for workers in many sectors of a country’s economy. Wages are high, and the
education
system needs to prepare large numbers of students up to and beyond secondary school
level
, with the skills to meet the needs of employers.
For example
, while technology is replacing many traditional jobs in
such
areas as agriculture, transport and heavy industry, it is
also
creating new jobs in other sectors.
Thus
, in economic terms, it is almost impossible to say how many highly-educated young people will be required for a nation’s workforce.
Secondly
, I contend that the purpose of
education
is much more fundamental than simply to prepare young people for the world of work.
Education
is nothing less than the acquisition of lifelong skills in thinking critically about all aspects of life. At its best, secondary
education
plays an essential part of helping young people to develop these critical skills. If the citizens of a country are informed and enlightened, problems
such
as a welfare system or the distribution of wealth can be intelligently debated. Without mass
education
to
this
level
, a country can have no responsible citizens. In conclusion,
although
in today’s volatile global economy, any country’s employment situation is subject to rapid changes, the intangible but real objectives of
education
dictate that young people should be educated to at least secondary
level
.
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Example:

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