More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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The pupil nowadays is so eager towards snacks more than healthy foods. In any nation, lots of young students are being fatty which

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impacts

is impacting

on rich countries.

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affects the countries in a lot of ways

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problem. One reason behind

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children overload is lack of parenting towards food quality. In the present World, people are so busy that they feed

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own children fast food which is mainly pizza, a burger,

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, it mainly affects the agriculture part of the nation because of less demand.

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USA 80 percent

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the USA 80 percent

of the people work Monday to Friday in that seventy-five percent of people don't make tiffin for

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children and allow them to eat outside. If guarding

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, due to the heavy body more adolescent is getting sick. The reason behind

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sickness is their immunity power degrades when they become

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metabolism and lower their endurance

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problem make them tire so easily. India is the

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largest populated country. Every year 11000 pupil

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dies

due to an increase in fat content which led to a cancer

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overweighted

usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it

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children get sick like

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country might have to build extra hospitals only for fat infants. In conclusion, eating food is allowable, but when it goes uncontrollable it bothers

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of them or themselves

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heath which probably makes them heavier. Mainly it can be controlled through proper guidance. If care is given at an appropriate level they can be saved from unwanted sickness which normally happens to fatigue people

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The pupil nowadays is so eager towards snacks more than healthy foods. In many nations, a lot of young students are being fatty which

impacting

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impacts

is impacting

on rich countries.

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affects the countries in a lot of ways

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problem.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

330 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary
caloric intake
processed foods
fast food culture
screen time
metabolic disorders
healthcare expenditure
lifestyle diseases
preventative strategies
nutritional education
public health policy
body mass index (BMI)
emotional well-being
stigmatization
exercise regimen
eating habits
junk food
socioeconomic factors
health literacy

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More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Some celebrations have lost their meaning and these occasions have become too much about spending money. What problems can this cause? What can be done to change the situation?

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Some people believe that after hundred years life will be easier for most of people, while the others are unsure. What is your opinion?

Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child development. However, others argue that other things like Television or friends have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.