Why do students prefer doing part-time jobs during their studies? Do you think this has more advantages than disadvantages.

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Nowadays, students are good at maintaining a balance between
study
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and
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.
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, during
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study they
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the study, they
the study they
prefer part-time
work
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in restaurants, cafes and so on.
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the benefits
and drawbacks of
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trend and show that, indeed, part-time
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during
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the study
is superior. There are numerous advantages of part-time
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during studies. By working with
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study they
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a study, they
a study they
can earn money. They can use
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money for their expenses and do not need to take money from parents.
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, in Australia, a majority of students are working in hotels, cafes and bars
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fill
their university fees.
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to it, during
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they will meet with like-minded people minded of their interest and would exchange their thoughts.
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interest can boost their knowledge and improve their communication skills.
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can helpful in
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a job interview
job interviews
the job interview
. Overall, daily expenses and interaction with people during
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is advantageous. Despite these
advantages it
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advantages, it
has some drawbacks as well. Students will have to face
distraction
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the distraction
with their studies. As a consequence, they will feel depression during examination and may receive poor results. To exemplify it, in newspaper we came across suicide news about students due to stress. What is more, students will feel
seclusion
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the seclusion
as they will not have time to spend with family. Due to
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they feel
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isolated
and depressed. In short, destruction
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of
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and loneliness destruction from
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study
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the study
studies
are the main disadvantages.
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essay discussed
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the way
in which part-time
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can affect
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study
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the study
of students. In my opinion,
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there are disadvantages associated with part-time
work
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, the advantages clearly outweigh them.
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