In many countries, people have health issues because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. What do you think the reasons for this and how can it be solved ?

The rising incidence of chronic
illnessess
impairment of normal physiological function affecting part or all of an organism
illnesses
illness
associated with
unhealthy
Suggestion
an unhealthy way
way
of living,
such
as diabetes and high blood pressure, is a growing concern in many countries. In recent years much
affort
earnest and conscientious activity intended to do or accomplish something
effort
is being put in
order
to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
why people still maintain
this
way
of living and how can it be changed in
order
to prevent the development of diseases. Many reasons may
acount
a record or narrative description of past events
account
why people still refuse to change certain aspects of their lives,
although
they are well
infromd
having much knowledge or education
informed
of the risks associated with it.
For example
, changes in diet and eating
habbits
an established custom
habits
may be
dificult
not easy; requiring great physical or mental effort to accomplish or comprehend or endure
difficult
to some due to time restrains. People prefer to eat fast
food
and
snaks
a light informal meal
snacks
on their
way
to work rather than spending time cooking a healthy meal at home.
Furthermore
, the high costs of good quality
food
,
such
as vegetables and low fat
food
may
further
explain why people still consume unhealthy
food
.
Lastly
, social pressure
emphesized
spoken with emphasis
emphasized
emphasize
emphasised
and marketed through online media
such
as
facebook
Suggestion
Facebook
and
instagram
,
also
explain why people still consume alcohol and smoke. Despite that, several changes may be performed in
order
to educate people and change their lifestyle.
Initially
, government
subsedised
having partial financial support from public funds
subsidized
programs to equalize healthy
food
costs is
crusial
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
crucially
so people will change their
food
intake.
Also
, improving
food
quality in work places will
further
ensure a healthy meal. Increasing taxes on unhealthy beverages,
such
as
cocca
United States comedienne who starred in early television shows with Sid Caesar (1908-2001)
Coca
coca
cocoa
colla
large genus of African trees bearing kola nuts
Cola
cola
, as well as
cigarrettes
finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking
cigarettes
cigarette
is
also
a vital step in changing people's lifestyle.
Finally
, strict control on social media and television to prevent publications of
harmfull
causing or capable of causing harm
harmful
materials should be
emplyed
having your services engaged for; or having a job especially one that pays wages or a salary
employed
implied
. In conclusion, primary prevention in the form of changing the
way
we live and eat is of the utmost importance in
order
to prevent chronic diseases and should be strongly supported.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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