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There have been a major advances in technology over recent decades and this has led to significant improvements in people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Owing to the developments in technical knowledge over the period of years, man has been a major beneficiary of
this
 innovation.
This
 essay will agree that new technologies has brought more help to humans in communication and health.
Firstly
, prior to new inventions, means of which people sent messages to their families and friends were quite challenging. Individuals had to use the post office or travel over a long distance which could take days and time limiting to deliver their messages. Whereas, with the advent of advanced softwares and technology
such
 as What's app, Yahoo mail and Telegram. People can now
countlessly
 and easily send thousands of messages that will be delivered in nanoseconds.
Moreso
Suggestion
More so
, in the health sector, the use automated machines has tremendously helped health
practictioners
someone who practices a learned profession
practitioners
practitioner
 for timely
diagonsing
identifying the nature or cause of some phenomenon
diagnosing
 of diseases and exploring more complicated surgeries. According to the National medical Association Kenya (NMA) there was
90% reduction
Suggestion
a 90 % reduction
 in mortality and morbidity rate
accross
to the opposite side
across
 the country when the government employed new machines
such
 as the Magnetic resonance imaging and X-ray equipments in all hospitals. These outcomes, undoubtedly shows the benefits of Hi tech to humans In conclusion, it is evident that increased technical knowledge has assisted mankind in sharing of information and adjusting the quality of life.
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