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Without capital punishment (death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of more violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society.

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It is argued that, the
death
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 penalty is needed to eradicate crime from the society. As there is no safety for one’s
live
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life
 and the number of brutal murders are
incrasing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
. In my opinion, I agree with the idea of harsh punishment of
death
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 because it creates a sense of fear in the mind of a criminal and at the same time state authorities should work on the permanent solution for these crimes. The only fear in anyone’s life is
death
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, whether it is criminal or a normal person. By passing a strict law of the
death
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 penalty against violent doers. If they attempt to do big crimes
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 as sexual violence, murder. There would be the only option left for an accused is
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.There are few countries enforced
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death
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penalty
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penalty, such
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 as
Soudi
of or relating to Saudi Arabia or its people
Saudi
 Arabia passed a bill of capital punishment for sexual violence and murder in 1967, the law was very simple state
sherriff
the principal law-enforcement officer in a county
sheriff
sheriffs
 would behead the
accussed
a defendant in a criminal proceeding
accused
 person in front of judicial court after hearing. For the permanent solution, government official and well established doctor must work on the psychology of
criminals
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criminal
criminal's
 mind. We get to know, why these people go on
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 destructive path. By doing
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, we can have a solution in the early stage of that person and one can avoid doing
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 crimes. One of the best examples of
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 situation is a scientist and doctors in the state of Telanagan, India
are now working
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is now working
 on
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 project called “Violent minds”. It is nothing but, reading minds of a criminal in every situation of his past and collecting the data of reaction, pleasure and necessity of doing violence.
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 surely solves a big problem of
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 society. In conclusion, It is better to enforce the sentence till
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 to create a fear in criminals and
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 official have to find a better way to stop crimes in the early stage of a
criminals
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criminal
.
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