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Nowadays most green energy is becoming evermore prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The world today uses more renewable
energy
 than ever before since it contributes to the preservation of the environment and is economically sound;
however
, some argue that green
energy
 could undermine the reliability of the global supply
as a result
 of its dependency on climatic and meteorological phenomena.
This
 essay will examine both views, but personally, I strongly advocate the adoption of renewable sources of
energy
. On the one hand, opponents of
renewables
that can be renewed or extended
renewable
renews
 claim that the world could face disruptions to the power supply should they be fully adopted.
This
 is largely due to the fact that many green
energy
 technologies currently in use depend on changeable and unpredictable phenomena
such
 as wind, rain and cloud cover. To take the fastest growing sector as an example, solar panels can only be used in the presence of strong and direct sunlight, and
although
 the problem of directness has already been somewhat solved with moving panel arrays, a cloudy few days could still result in a blackout if we depended entirely on solar power; something
that is
 unlikely to occur today given current oil stockpiles.
However
, fossil fuels are a larger threat to
energy
 security since they are certainly finite in quantity, whereas renewable
energy
 is effectively infinite; once the Earth’s oil is depleted, there will be no
energy
 security without green
energy
 technologies.
Furthermore
, problems of unpredictability can be mitigated by improving battery technologies (to create a larger buffer), building more renewable
energy
 generators (to increase supply during ideal conditions) and improving current technologies (to increase efficiency),
such
 as in the moving solar panel example. Proponents of
renewables
Accept comma addition
renewable, therefore
renewable therefore
therefore
 claim that they are
the most economically
Suggestion
the most economical
 sound option. To conclude, while many may believe that green
energy
 technologies are a threat to
energy
 security, the fossil fuels they frequently promote are a greater threat, and
renewables
 are in fact the only sound option, both economically and environmentally.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Hydro energy
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Global warming
  • Climate change
  • Technology advancements
  • Economies of scale
  • Intermittent
  • Variable
  • Capital investment
  • Energy infrastructure
  • Energy storage technology
  • Energy supply
  • Energy security
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