Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

The number of tertiary educational institutions has been steadily increasing over the past decade, with the burgeoning of the centres under the private wing.
This
has allowed the public to have easier access to the university regardless of the financial and social background. It seems as if we have achieved the aim of equal academic opportunity for all, ironically it is not. The poor still suffer and encounters more difficulties when advancing to the tertiary level as compared to its counterpart. The biggest problem is limited resources. Families who only capable meeting daily needs will struggle to send their children to school, not to mention any private funded institution which is known for its excellent quality;
which will be again
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which will again be
out of reach for the poor.
In addition
, many times, children from
such
backgrounds will have a higher tendency to be involved in juvenile activities as no proper guidance neither by the busy parents who are trying hard to make a living nor the school as many teachers in
such
areas are already fixated with the thought of these children being useless students. Thence, the door leading to higher education system has shut down much earlier, giving them no option but to become dropouts.
Moreover
, the poor will have to compete fiercely with others from the population to be able to enter into the system. They must excel academically and attain scholarships if they are incapable of paying expensive fees. They have to struggle and handle more worries in order to be recognized as an undergraduate. On the opposite side, the rich will never face any of those problems due to strong financial support. Private tutors are available for teaching if the performance is poor; parents spend more time guiding and encouraging their children to study. Not only that, the rich
also
enjoy an influential social background, as many academicians themselves are
also
within the same level. These people enjoy the benefit of favouritism as many are connected as family friends, which we all know it being a hidden rule despite the so-called meritocracy system for entering into institutions. In conclusion, the poor faces many
challenges to reach to
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challenges to reach
the varsity in terms of finance, support, and social constraints.
Therefore
, I disagree that both share the similar problem accessing to tertiary education, I think the poor suffer more difficulties.
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