Nowadays many scientists and tourists would like to travel to remote natural environments, such as the South Pole. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Technology is increasing rapidly and scientists are doing some invention to travel to remote places,
such
as
south pole
Suggestion
the south pole
. There are many advantages and disadvantages of
this
development.
To begin
with, there are many advantages to
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
to
remote natural environment
Suggestion
a remote natural environment
like people travel to
such
remote places for outing
,
Accept space
,
site
an instance of visual perception
sight
seeing
,
Accept space
,
paragliding
Suggestion
Paragliding
and many more
activites
any specific behavior
activities
, so with the help of all
this
things
Suggestion
thing
humans are able to enjoy many sport activities and
also
get a chance to watch some unique
see
a division of an ocean or a large body of salt water partially enclosed by land
sea
creatures
for example
, unique birds, animals. Humans
also
feel some relaxation in
this
places
Suggestion
place
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
of many
nature
Suggestion
natural
beauty
Suggestion
beauties
and rare creatures. Nowadays scientists
has developed
Suggestion
have developed
some gadgets to reach
this
remote
places
Suggestion
place
, so with the help of
this
plural of "this"
these
gadgets people easily enjoy
this places
Suggestion
this place
these places
far more
confortable
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
. On the
otherhand
Suggestion
other hand
, there are some disadvantages like
this
remote places are very dangerous
for example
, narrow roads
,
Accept space
,
wild animals, no shops
,
Accept space
,
exterme
of the greatest possible degree or extent or intensity
extreme
weather. So all
this
plural of "this"
these
those
things make place more dangerous many people who do dangerous sport activity there. Apart from
this
vistor
someone who visits
visitor
spend a lot of money to reach at their
for example
, humans
also
do medical checkup before
go
Suggestion
goes
there so its like a waste of money for
somepeople
Suggestion
some people
. To conclude, it is now possible to reach remote places with of help of gadgets that made by scientists, but people avoid
to do
Suggestion
doing
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
dangerous activity which is not good for human life.
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