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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#inventors #society #doctors
Inventors are inventive people who create helpful
iventions
the creation of something in the mind
inventions
 and progress new ideas
to
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for
 serving humanity. Doctors are specialists who have been trained in medicine to treat patients. In my opinion, both types of people are important to society. Inventors have a great influence on our life. In the past, they invented things like air-conditioner, electricity and
television which
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television, which
 change working
coditions
the prevailing context that influences the performance or the outcome of a process
conditions
 positively and give people entertainment.
In addition
, inventors created
computer
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the computer
a computer
 and the internet which we are almost entirely dependent on nowadays.
On the other hand
, doctors are knowledgeable about medicine so they can give us useful advice and help us feel
more better
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better
 when we are ill. If there
are
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is
 no doctor,
noone
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no one
 can cure the sick and mortality will strongly increase.
Therefore
, it is true without doubt that inventors and doctors have an enormous impact on humanity. Actually, they rely on each other. Doctors use equipment of inventors to cure sick people. Inventors have
doctors
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a doctors
 help them when they are ill. In conclusion, inventors and doctors play an important role in our
life
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lives
 so it is difficult to say who is more important.
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