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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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It is argued that, because of advancement in
technology
 in recent times, there is a shift in the way people communicate with each other. Even though there are downsides to
technology
, we have been able to connect more with people than ever before. In my opinion, the advantages of
technology
 outweighs
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 disadvantages. People who argue about the negative impact of
technology
 often say that it has amplified human negative traits,
such
 as jealousy, greed etc. To an extent, it is true. With the penetration of social media,
such
 as
facebook
Suggestion
Facebook
 and
instagram
, people are more interested in exhibiting a false image of themselves to the internet world.
Moreover
, we have started limiting our communication mode to text messages
instead
 of face-to-face communication, which was the preferred way of communication earlier.
However
, the benefits of
technology
 on our interaction are far more than its downside. The internet can be used to find old friends and colleagues.
Also
 with social media, we can stay in touch and keep
ourselves
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
 updated about the happenings in our loved ones' lives. To give an example, I was able to find one of my childhood friends through
facebook
Suggestion
Facebook
. We sort of drifted apart after college days and I did not have any of his contact details. With Facebook, I could
finally
 find him.
This
 essay explained the pros and cons of
technology
 on the way we interact with each other.
Although
 there are few negatives of using
technology
,
technology
 has helped us more in staying connected with each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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