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The table illustrates the data of native speakers among six languages as well as the
number
 of speakers as an additional
language
. Overall, the statistic of speakers of Mandarin Chinese is dramatically larger than the others. It is indicated that there are 900
million
 people who speak Mandarin and consider it as a
first
language
.
In contrast
, there are only 190
million
 speakers who speak as an additional
language
. What is remarkable about English speakers is that the
number
 of speakers as an additional
language
 is greater than the
number
 native ones which account for 603
million
 and 339
million
 respectively. It is demonstrated that the total
number
 of Hindi speakers is approximately equal to that of Spanish speakers (490
million
 and 420
million
 respectively).
However
, the
number
 of speakers who speak these languages and have seen that as a
second
language
 is slightly different. The
number
 of Spanish speakers (70
million
) is
fewer
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less
 than that of Hindi speakers (120
million
).
Last
 but not least, concerning with Arabic and Portuguese, the
number
 of native speakers of these two languages is similar that with 206
million
 and 203
million
 respectively.
Nevertheless
, the
number
 of Arabic speakers as an additional
language
 is almost 2.5 times higher than that of Portuguese speakers. In conclusion, the
most two significant
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two most significant
figure
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figures
 are Mandarin Chinese and English comparing with the total
number
 among six languages which constitute 1090
million
 and 942
million
 respectively.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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