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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The graph shows how employerer free time activity was passed enjoyab

The graph shows how employerer free time activity was passed enjoyab
The graph shows how
employerer
Correct your spelling
employer
employers
 free
time
Use synonyms
 activity was passed
enjoyable
Change the adjective
enjoyably
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 at except
of
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apply
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work in 1998-99 by sex and
employement
Correct your spelling
employment
 types. A glance at the graph reveals that most
of
Change preposition
apply
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people
Add an article
the people
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 could
found
Wrong verb form
find
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 funny
time
Use synonyms
 in leisure. As
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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the presented diagram shows that employed people
which
Correct pronoun usage
who
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 is
full
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full-time
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time
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 or part
time
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 not
so
Add a missing verb
have so
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 much
time
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 as than different
employement
Correct your spelling
employment
employments
 status.
However
Linking Words
,
part
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part-time
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time
Use synonyms
 employed
male
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males
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 gender had
worst
Correct article usage
the worst
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 leisure
time
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. by the way,
full
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full-time
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time
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 female
employerer
Correct your spelling
employees
 passed
time
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 over 38 hours,
part
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part-time
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time
Use synonyms
employerer
Correct your spelling
employees
 is 40 too. non-workers had
more
Correct article usage
a more
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funny
Replace the word
fun
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time
Use synonyms
 than other. the possibility is too much leisure
time
Use synonyms
 was growth the number of graph
statistic
Fix the agreement mistake
statistics
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at
Change preposition
to
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 over
the
Correct article usage
apply
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70 hours.
in contrast
Linking Words
, the
housewiwes
Correct your spelling
housewives
 was

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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