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More and more develping coutries are expanding their tourist industries. Why is that ? Is it a positive development ?

#coutries #tourist #industries #development
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In many
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
cultures
cities
, the tourist industry
represent
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represents
 a vital way of
finicial
involving financial matters
financial
 income. Recently, several developing
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
have been investing
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have invested
substantial amount
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a substantial amount
substantial amounts
 of money in order to expand
this
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 way of earning.
This
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investement
the act of investing; laying out money or capital in an enterprise with the expectation of profit
investment
investments
 may have
determinental
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
 effects on their
economical
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economic
stbility
the quality or attribute of being firm and steadfast
stability
 and
developement
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
. Several reasons may explain
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 invest in tourism.
Initially
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, increasing the amount of tourists
lead
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leads
 to
influx
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an influx
 of foreign money which is being
spend
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spent
 in the local markets and restaurants. A new
artical
nonfictional prose forming an independent part of a publication
article
 published by the Hravard University has shown that increased
amount
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amounts
 of tourists by 8% a year lead to increased earnings in local shops by at least 20%.
Also
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, tourism can lead to increased need for working hands,
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such as workers to
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such as workers
 build new hotels and people who will work
in
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with
 them,
further
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 expanding the local economy.
Lastly
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, foreign visitors have an affect the local citizens as they are required to learn new languages and engage with new cultures. In my opinion, investing in foreign visitors is a positive
developement
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
 and should be supported. In many
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
cultures
cities
, especially developing
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 where natural resources are scarce investing in
industry
Suggestion
the industry
 or technology is practically impossible. Tourism
represent
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represents
 a good method to increase the local economy as it require relatively minimal
invetsment
the act of investing; laying out money or capital in an enterprise with the expectation of profit
investment
 and the reward may be substantial. In conclusion, tourism is an
imprortant
of great significance or value
important
 way for economical
expanshion
the act of increasing (something) in size or volume or quantity or scope
expansion
 and should not be overlooked. It may help many
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
cultures
 and lead to financial stability and prosperity.
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