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Living in a country where you have to speak to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree aur disagree with this statement.

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Nowadays, more people wish to live in foreign countries for higher education or a good job.
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, in abroad people have to
face
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 different challenges. Among them one is speaking foreign
language
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 which could possibly cause social and practical problems.
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 will be
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examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
 what social and practical problem a
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person
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person's
face
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 in
foreign country
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a foreign country
 with respect to
language
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.   Living in a foreign country with less command of
foreign
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a foreign language
foreign languages
language
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 can
made
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make
 a
person
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 to two
face
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 serious challenges in socializing with people.
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, my friend went to Russia for study purpose.
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 he studied in English, but at the time of socializing with Russian he had to
face
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 a lot of hassle because of unfamiliarity with Russian
language
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.
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, basic knowledge about foreign
language
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 where a
person
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 wants to live, is necessary in order to cope with
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 challenges. It is obvious that if communication among people are not
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satisfied
, how come work performance will be good?   On
other hand
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the other hand
, foreign
language
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 can
also
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 cause practical issues as well.
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 for my uncle who worked in the UK, had to
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 difficulty in getting his supervisor's command while working in the factory. He used to ask his other colleagues, the meaning of what his supervisor asked him to do.   After looking at the above, it can be understandable that foreign
language
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 while living in
foreign country
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a foreign country
foreign countries
 can possibly cause social and practical problems.
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, it is important to encourage the
person
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 to learn, how to speak
foreign
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a foreign language
foreign languages
language
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 before he or she go there to live.
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