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Do you think that technology advancement has brought more harm than good? Use specific reason and details to support your answer.

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Societies have developed rapidly over time due to
many advances
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the many advances
 in
technology
.
Technology
 has changed our lives. Some people would argue that there are many advantages of the advanced
technology
 while
rest
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the rest
 of the people think that the advancement of
technology
 is causing more damage than good. I believe
this
 trend has more drawbacks that I will discuss in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand,
technology
 has given us orientation and improve our standard of living mostly on communication skills. We can easily communicate our opinions and principles
from
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of
 the smart phones, computers and various electronic gadgets. Nowadays, the smart phone has become an indispensable device. There is no doubt that
internet
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the internet
 has revolutionised our lives in
such
 a big way that we can delve any information by just clicking
of
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on
 a button.
For instance
, we have online shops to fulfil our shopping needs, online banks to manage our cash, social media to stay in touch with our close ones.
On the other hand
, there are numerous dangers with the excessive use of
technology
. People who are more exposed to
technology
 live in isolation.
This
 can often
seen
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see
 in teenagers spending most of their time on
internet
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the internet
. Children are becoming more isolated and are not able to concentrate on their studies,
thus
 getting
the low
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lower
 grades in their exams.
In addition
 to that, children are growing up in an environment where everything is just a click
away which
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away, which
 has affected their communication and interpersonal skills,
hence
 they cannot express themselves clearly.
Furthermore
,
technology
 decreases the social connection in young generation. In conclusion, to a certain extent, I would agree that the easy access to various information could be harmful to the humankinds.
However
, the advanced
technology
also
 brings a lot of benefits to the societies.
Submitted by Neha Malhotra on

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