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Many people believe that reducing speed limits is the best option for road safety improvement. Do you think there are other measures that could be put in place? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In the recent times, people tend to be under the impression that
reduction
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a reduction
 in speed limit serves as the most adequate measure to improve road safety. In my opinion,
this
 could be
one
 of the
reason but
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reason, but
 there are addition formats
too
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too, such
to such
such
 as individual awareness, strict government traffic policies,
paragoned
showing intellectual penetration or emotional depth
profound
 road structure and so on. On
one
 hand the public is in the belief that speeding is the only reasons for an accident, which is not
necessarily true always
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always necessarily true
necessarily always true
. At the same time going at an unusual speed without having
concern
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concerns
a concern
 about the passerby or the pedestrian is
also
 dangerous. Having
strict limit
Suggestion
a strict limit
 of speed could reduce
accidents escpecially
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accidents, especially
accidents especially
 when learners are on the roads. It could
also
 help a person be stable and composed while driving.
On the other hand
 principles should come from an individual. Even if
one
 decides to stop at the signal he or she would be frightened
to
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of
into
by
 being hit by the ones behind. Even if
one
 chooses to strictly follow the
drivers
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driver's
rules the
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rules, the
 ones around him might break it leading to fatal accidents. To exemplify
one
such
 situation, the 2010 ban on traffic orange in japan had strict implications
to
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for
 passengers to stop even if the signal was on orange.
This
 led to more deaths than before
.
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.
 To conclude, it is your responsibility to reduce traffic on the roads. Traffic being
such
 a subtle problem of the present generation,
government
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the government
 should raise exorbitant fines on those who break them.
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