Some people believe that if people are allowed to work after the age of 60, it causes problems. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that, it will create many difficulties, if old age people above sixty are allowed to work. In my opinion, I completely disagree with the statement because, as they got vast
experience
they can be given different
role
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role, such
such
as handling people or can be advisors for the betterment of the organization. To embark upon, they are the best diplomatics and are better in handling different types of people. Due to their enormous exposure in meeting different people
throught
from beginning to end
through
out their career. They can easily judge people and talk
accordingly
,
most important thing
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the most important thing
is they can motivate people through their
experience
and knowledge to give best.
For example
, Indian cricket team, head coach Sunil
Gavaskar who
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Gavaskar, who
was the main pillar in winning world cup 2011, after two
defeat
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defeats
in
first
two matches, he was the one took charge and motivate players by sharing his
experience
on
such
a big platform and
then
after rest is the history.
Additionally
, they can be the right person in advising in certain situation and predicting any threat in
near future
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the near future
for the business. While expanding any business, they
plays
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play
an important role due to their immense knowledge of
market
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the market
and they predict
quiet easily
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a quiet ease
quiet ease
the quiet ease
any problems or
threata
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threat an
threat a
in
near future
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the near future
.
For example
, Facebook’s
seniro
older; higher in rank; longer in length of tenure or service
senior
advisor Kabir
singh
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Singh
was the man behind for buying
company
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a company
called
whatsapp
for 19 billion and it turned out to be the best deal ever in the history. In conclusion, I strongly disagree
becauses
for the reason that; on account of
because
age old people are
big
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the biggest
asset for any organization in handling people and guiding for the betterment with the help of their
experience
.
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