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Both poor and rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
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Entry into
university
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 irrespective of socioeconomic status has always been a controversial topic,
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 controversies the alarming question is that whether tertiary education is even accessible to all the students or not? I agree with the statement and believe that it has become extremely hard for the students to even enter
university
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 owing to the disproportion in the
student
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 number and seat availability, compounded with increased percentage of scholars and fee structure.
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 with, in recent decades the secondary school graduated
student
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 numbers has tremendously increased, resulting in asymmetry between the eligible students and available seats.
This
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 difference creates burden on the
university
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 management, compelling them to raise the standards of eligibility.
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, in 2018, India, 1 million students graduated from schools, whereas the seats available is only around 0.1 million, statistically making a
student
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 entry hard to a
university
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.
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, despite making academic standards high, the management
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 demanded huge amounts as compensation to allocate particular seats.
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, making it unapproachable for the students of both high and low socioeconomic groups.
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, according to a recent article in TIMES newspaper, it is mentioned that,
university
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 fee has sky rocketed meaning it costs a life for the
student
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’s parents to afford a
university
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 seat globally, either it could be a developed country or a developing country. To conclude,
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 having studied so hard for years with good grades, still the students are unable to be sure of entering a top
university
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, irrespective of their
economical
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economic
 status to fulfil their dream.
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, strengthening my argument that financial status does not play a key role in obtaining a
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 access to
university
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.
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