The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph given

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portrays the difference in the maximum number of elephants from 1994 to 2007.

Overall

, it is known to decrease worldwide across all

contries

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countries

except for

Loas

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Laos

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Loans

. Considering the population of

elephant

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elephants

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in India in the year 1994, it is around 1000, but

this

number drastically fell

down

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to about 7500 in 2007. Countries

such

vietnam

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and China

experience

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slight

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decrease,

whereas

Malaysia and Thailand saw

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decline in number.

On the other hand

, Cambodia is the only country which is observed to show an increase in

maximum

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the maximum

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count of elephants.

To conclude

, elephants on the whole reduced worldwide in most of the

contries

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countries

However

one of them saw a rise and the other saw no change in their values.

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