Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent, while others think that people have become independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the 21st

century few people

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century, few people

believe that the

dependency

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rate

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is higher to each other. Other think that nowadays people have become more independent.

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essay discuses

firstly

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discusses with the people believe on dependent and

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secondly it

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secondly, it

discusses with the scenario of independent people

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the world. In my

opinion

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the independent

rate

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is slightly increased in the modern era. On the one hand, some people think that most of the people are dependent on their husband or male members of the families. It means in the context of our nation very few people get

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job

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jobs

and they have

responsibility

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a responsibility

the responsibility

feed their all

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feed all their

family members.

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, they should care their

children

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children's

child's

education and other necessary materials. If the main person of the family died or

accident

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accident, then

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his family

fail

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fails

in great trauma.

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the data of the ministry of employment of Nepal

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show

that nearly about 70% family

member's

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members'

people, only one members have

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job

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jobs

and all members dependent on him as well as if the jobholder person died

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family fall on worse situation.

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, I disagree with

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opinion

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because other family members

also

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doing

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job

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a job

the job

and getting opportunities

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, people argue that the

rate

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of independent is slightly increased. The

rate

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of independence

rate

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is slightly increased as well as the

rate

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dependency

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decrees because a lot of industries have been open and people get

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job

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jobs

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the factory or industry.

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is to say that people are not only dependent on the male

member's

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members'

family members. They

have

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have also been doing

have also done

are also doing

were also doing

were also done

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doing

works

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work

on the industries. For illustration a research carried out by Tribhuban University Shows that in our nation that the factory or industry highly established and people get on

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job

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a job

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the factory and

dependency

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rate

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is decreased did with

this

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opinion

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because I do not find any jobless people in my village. In conclusion, some people believe that the

dependency

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rate

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is gradually

goes

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going

off families are dependent with major person of the family. Other people

thinks

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think

that the

rate

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dependency

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is slightly decreased in my

opinion

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the

rate

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dependency

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is gradually

goes

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going

up.

In the 21st century, few people believe that the dependency rate is higher for each other. Other think that nowadays people have become more independent. This essay discusses firstly discusses with the people believe independent and secondly, it discusses with the scenario of independent people on the world. In my opinion, the independent rate is slightly increased in the modern era. On the one hand, some people think that most of the people are dependent on their husband or male members of the families. It means in the context of our nation very few people get a job and they have the responsibility to feed there all family members. Moreover, they should care about their children education and other necessary materials. If the main person of the family died or accident then his family fail in great trauma. For example, the data of the ministry of employment of Nepal shows that nearly about 70% family member's people, only one member have a job and all members dependent on him as well as if the jobholder person died then family falls on the worse situation. However, I disagree with this opinion because other family members also doing a job and getting opportunities On the other hand, people argue that the rate of independent is slightly increased. The rate of independence rate is slightly increased as well as the rate of dependency decrees because a lot of industries have been open and people get a job in the factory or industry. This is to say that people are not only dependent on the male member's family members. They have also done works on the industries. For illustration research carried out by Tribhuban University Shows that in our nation that the factory or industry highly established and people get on the job on the factory and dependency rate is decreased did with this opinion because I do not find any jobless people in my village. In conclusion, some people believe that the dependency rate gradually goes off families are dependent on the major person of the family. Other people think that the rate of dependency is slightly decreased in my opinion the rate of dependency is gradual goes up. Tue Jul 16 2019

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interdependence
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minimal reliance
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