Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Among parents and educators there is a heated debate about what is more
important to teach to
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important to teach
children- how to compete or co-operate.
Although
both sides present convincing arguments, I strongly believe that both are equally vital
to shape
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shaping
a mature adult. Supporters of cooperation indicate two main reasons why it is so crucial.
Firstly
,
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
is an absolutely necessary requirement for many occupations.
For instance
, in the healthcare setting, if doctors, nurses and other healthcare professionals did not support each other, patients would not receive the best possible care.
In addition
, the cooperation in
this
work environment seems to increase job satisfaction of multidisciplinary team members.
Secondly
, the
imput
signal going into an electronic system
input
import
impute
from the number of experts would be of paramount importance for any breakthrough discoveries.
This
is due to extremely narrow specialisation in many scientific fields.
For example
, creation of bionic limbs, especially
arms
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the arms
, required the substantial contribution from surgeons,
neuroscientists
, biophysicists and engineers.
On the other hand
, many argue that children ought to be primarily taught how to compete.
First
of all, competition forms the bases for survival of humankind.
This
is owing to the fact that the supply does not meet the demand in plenty of situations in adult life. Simply, in many sectors fewer job positions are available compared to the number of candidates applying for them.
Moreover
, fair competition might provide motivation for new developments. Seeing a company which achieves success could motivate the manager of the other one to search for better ways of running the business. In conclusion, I think that cooperation and competition are complementary and equally important competencies to be taught at school. Both of them are necessary to benefit not only the society, but
also
the individual.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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