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Some people say that shops should sell food made locally whenever possible than selling imported foods. Do you agree or disagree?

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Should local foods be sold in shops?. Yes, of course. I totally agree that people should inculcate
patrotic
inspired by love for your country
patriotic
patriotism
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 habit of selling and equally buying edibles made locally than selling foreign foods.
This
 essay will delve into
reasons
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the reasons
 why shops should sell their native
food
 in the following paragraphs. Some edibles should be consumed fresh and almost immediately after preparation. Selling local foods within a place where is produced is a healthy way of eating fresh
food
. Most imported foods are usually stale and require a lot of preservatives to keep them fresh till they get to the consumers, which might take several months.
For instance
, most canned foods which are transported from developed to developing countries are usually preserved with a lot of salt which is not so healthy. In order
wards
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to ward
, malls should imbibe the habit of marketing native foods which are known to be fresh and consumed faster by the people.
Furthermore
, patronizing local
food
 vendors will equally boast the economy the nation by creating employment
this
also
 improves the standard of living of the people. To illustrate, Countries like Thailand and Indonesia primarily produce rice for their consumption and for export purposes.
There
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Their
 economy depends
soley
without any others being included or involved
solely
 on rice production because their
countrys
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country's
countries
country
 patronage for
this
produce
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product
 is high.
Finally
, selling of local
food
, boost the culture of a particular place. A tourist coming into a country will identify
such
food
 easily due to its availability in shops. In conclusion, shops should
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
 to sell local foods to improve the life of the people who produce
such
 foods and
also
 to improve the economy of the nation.
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