Government give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Some would argue that, it is a healthy sign as government is financing artists. While other says
this
money could have been used on other projects.
Although
, an artist need financial help in the initial stage of their career.
However
, I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
believes
that there are other departments which state need to give priorities
such
as
health
care
. On the one hand, some say, in
early stage
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the early stage
of any artist needs funds to master in their respective
art
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artistic
field and showcase their talent. At
young age
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a young age
the young age
to learn all crafts of movie making is only possible to attend international
film
schools and it is every expensive for a middle class person.
For example
, An Indian
film
director SS Raja
mouli
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Mouli
, who went on to win four national awards for his best movies. His dream to
became
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become
film director
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a film director
film directors
fulfilled only because, he got financial help from the state government to study
in
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at
New York
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the New York film academy
film
academy in the initial years of his career.
However
, I believe that art does not solve
major problems
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the major problems
of our society.
Government
Suggestion
The government
should start
invest
Suggestion
investing
more in
health
care
which can be beneficial for
evevryone
all people
everyone
.
On the other hand
,
Government
Suggestion
the Government
first
invests more in
health
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the health care sector
care
sector which is very important because. In every country diabetes is the major
health
problem. If
state funds
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the state funds
for diabetic research it will solve entire country’s problem.
For example
, in India many decades ago,
new born
recently born
newborn
babies were suffering from vitamin deficiency which was very severer and babies were dying.
Then
Indian government
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the Indian government
deceded
recognizable; marked
decided
decoded
and made a huge investment in the Polio research, after
few years
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a few years, this
a few years this
this
problem got solved completely and new babies were taking birth healthy. To conclude,
Istrongly
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I strongly
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
Government should
first
invest in the
mojor
of greater importance or stature or rank
major
problems of the
societ
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
Soviet
like
health
care
and
then
invests on artists.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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