Government give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#government #support #artists #people #waste #money

Some would argue that, it is a healthy sign as government is financing artists. While other says

this

money could have been used on other projects.

Although

, an artist need financial help in the initial stage of their career.

However

, I

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

believed

believes

that there are other departments which state need to give priorities

such

health

care

. On the one hand, some say, in

early stage

Suggestion

the early stage

of any artist needs funds to master in their respective

art

Suggestion

artistic

field and showcase their talent. At

young age

Suggestion

a young age

the young age

to learn all crafts of movie making is only possible to attend international

film

schools and it is every expensive for a middle class person.

For example

, An Indian

film

director SS Raja

mouli

Suggestion

Mouli

, who went on to win four national awards for his best movies. His dream to

became

Suggestion

become

film director

Suggestion

a film director

film directors

fulfilled only because, he got financial help from the state government to study

Suggestion

New York

Suggestion

the New York film academy

film

academy in the initial years of his career.

However

, I believe that art does not solve

major problems

Suggestion

the major problems

of our society.

Government

Suggestion

The government

should start

invest

Suggestion

investing

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

301 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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