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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The deterioration of environment attracts much government’s concern. It leads to the controversy about raising
fuel
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 cost. While some people argue that
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 practice can reduce consuming
fuel
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 and lessen air pollution, I think it is not the best way to tackle the problems as there are better ways and the
price
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 increases could lead to economic issues.
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 with, several measures could be applied to decelerate the rate of pollution.
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, rather than non-renewable resources, government should invest in alternatives
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 as wind and solar energy. These kinds of power have been
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proven
 as effective ways to mitigate carbon dioxide emission in Europe and America.
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, enhancing public transportation and reducing travelling cost could encourage people to use public vehicles more;
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, vehicles’
fume
the state or quality of being widely honored and acclaimed
fame
 could be reduced. Apart from the government, automobile corporations could contribute to the reduction of greenhouse gas emission by manufacturing electric products.
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, electric cars of Tesla use electricity as the main power leads to the decrease in exhaust.
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, increasing the
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 of
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 cause a burden on the economy.
Fuel
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 cost determines the market
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 as rising
fuel
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 costs could lead to another increase in the
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 of daily used groceries, food, and other households.
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, middle and low-class families are unable to afford household expenditure.
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, the gap between the poor and the rich is
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widened, which
 could result in economy economic instability and inflation. In conclusion, I strongly believe that raising the
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 of
fuel
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 is not the best measure to address environmental problems.
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