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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult What is your opinion about this?

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There are diverging opinions on the applicability and
need
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the need
 for a
night
 curfew to be enforced on teenagers. While both viewpoints have their valid reasons, I strongly believe that it is crucial to have a
night
 curfew to guard our young people from a variety of dangers and risks.
First
 of all, criminals are believed to be the most active. Studies of crime records in the United States have revealed that more than eighty percent of crimes are committed at
night
. Unfortunately, criminals find it very easy to deceive youngsters, as they are still naive and innocent.
Therefore
, teenagers should be kept
at
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in
 safe places
such
 as homes and dorms at
night
, unless there is an adult escorting them. Another point to put into consideration is that illicit drugs and alcohol are readily available to teenagers in many parts of the United States. Being unaware of its repercussions and in their pursuit to fit in, some teenagers are pressured to consume drugs and alcohol
in
Suggestion
at
 parties that mainly
take place at late
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take place late at
 nights.
Thus
, all measures, including enforcing curfews, should be taken to protect teens from falling as victims
to
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of
 these kinds of dangerous substances. Putting all points into consideration, most dangerous and criminal activities occur at
night
, and it is commonly known that teenagers are the main victims of these things. While preventing the young generation from enjoying their time at
night
 could be annoying, in my opinion, curfews should be enforced as safety should always transcend pleasure and fun.
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