In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Many people around the globe suffer from hunger despite recent advancements in agriculture.

This

seems to be due to the

unaffordability

and lack of facilities to store and transport the food. These both causes would be resolved by creating the equal opportunities of source of income and bringing up the proper reservoir system and transportation.

Unaffordability

is one of the main reasons for the hunger crises at most of the parts of

world

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the world

in-spite of the well modernized developments in agriculture. These advancements have a price to pay that, making

lives

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the lives

of the farmer easy with the overall increase in field production and keeping the huge profits are affecting the cost of the final product that directly or indirectly

effects

have an effect upon

affects

the price for

consumer

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the consumer

who is already from a low-income group. The

second

problem arrives when a good quantity of crop from a farm has been

cultivated but

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cultivated, but

due to lack of storage facilities in bulk amount and transportation, which results in rotting of the extra crop. To balance the situation, work should be done on creating more job opportunities that would make people financially strong to bear the price of progress and proper storage facilities up to the required numbers should be made, whereas transportation issue that contributes to major loss due to improper handling should be addressed

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priority basis

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a priority basis

. To sum up, world hunger can be

very serious issue

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a very serious issue

if not dealt on

prompt

Suggestion

prompts

basis. All these modern techniques for

more agriculture

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more agricultural

production will go

vein if

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vein, if

all the product that cannot be consumed properly. Relying on the advancements

for

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production only isn’t a solution and giving people opportunities to raise their financial status and providing the facilities for balanced distribution should be ensured.

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Topic Vocabulary:

inequality
distribution
access to resources
climate change
natural disasters
political factors
economic factors
agricultural practices
infrastructure
transportation
population growth
education
knowledge
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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Fully explain your ideas

In some places old age is valued, while in other culture youth is considered more importance. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying medicines and treatments by themselves instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Attending a live performance (for example, a play, a concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?