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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others belive the money should be spent on improving existing public transport

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In a number of countries, some people are of the opinion that huge amount of money must be spent to construct new
railway
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 lines for very fast trains between cities. Contrary to
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 belief, others believe the money can be devoted to improvise existing public
transport
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. In any country
transport
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 is of great importance to its public. People travel from one place to another for their work or household purposes.
Personally I
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Personally, I
 believe it is better to work on improvising existing public
transport
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. The reason is quite
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simple, although
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 fancy new improvised
railway
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 lines could be necessary to have a number one ranking in
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, the planning and development use up most of the time. As with the existing, a few modifications won’t bring the public to a complete standstill.
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, in building a new infrastructure the cost of travel would
increase which
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increase, which
 in turn would cause an inconvenience to the public.
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, some people hold the view that money spent on the construction of new
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 lines is a necessity. In
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 case, those few people fail to consider the time and inconvenience that would be caused to the public during
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 time of construction.
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 anything built new is better than to repair the old is a common thought. In summary, I would think that it is better to dedicate funds in order to improvise the current
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 lines that help the current staff and public to value the government as well the infrastructure its city holds.
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