Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others.Do you agree or disagree?

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Today people

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Today, people

are being dominated

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has been dominated

by the

television

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programs.These advertisements or shows on the

television

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make individuals dig into it

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which make them tired of meeting with their own individuals.There is no-doubt that indulging in these kind of activities make them lazy.

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, younger generations are more indulged in

television

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programs than others the present world. Due to

this

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issue relation gap between families are getting disoriented.

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, some children are less active in academics and sports due to

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problem.

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, series like Game of thrones made people watch their whole episodes.

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largely

effected

acted upon; influenced

affected

some families in United states of

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series they forgot to cook for

whole day

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the whole day

a whole day

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, some shows in the

television

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effect people in their own life

as a

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result they

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result, they

obliterate their own family and friends.From the invention of

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electronic device people are more into movies in

thier

of them or themselves

their

there

theatre

daily life.Some people prioritize watching a show

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going for a family get together.

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In 2015 at the time of

Fifa

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FIFA

world cup

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Some channels TRP level was

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the peak because

instead

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of watching that match on the stadium people were watching it on

television

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with out

in absence of

without

their families.

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Television

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make

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makes

people sit

infront

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in front

of some shows

deliberatly

with intention; in an intentional manner

deliberately

and make them forget

there

of them or themselves

their

mates. Considering all the facts presented

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I firmly agree with the statement that

Television

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forcefully control

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forcefully controls

people.And avoid them to tie with

there

of them or themselves

their

own individuals.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

241 words

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Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others.Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?