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Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree?

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The laws of Britain and Australia state that the jury involved in a criminal case is given no access to background information about the defendant’s past criminal record.
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 as a matter of fact protects the person accused of the criminal charge against him. Few lawyers are of the opinion that
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 practice should be revised and the judging committee must be given access before they give their final verdict. I strongly agree with the group of lawyers that suggest understanding the past criminal records before having their final judgment on the accused. Certain crimes like theft, murders etc.
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 from an understanding of the individual’s personality. A linkage
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 the past will bring light as to the understanding the accused at hand.
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: In the movie “The Green Mile” the accused was a man charged
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 false claims of him murdering two young girls. The truth
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 just, that he was found beside the dead body of those children.
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 with no excuse to hear, the officers handed him over to be hung to death. In
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 case only after his death did an official discover the truth.
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 a past sketch of the person with troubles through childhood or youth may stumble the decision of the jury.
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 can
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 aggravate the situation and turn the case against the accused. To conclude with, it is necessary to draw past activities to ascertain that the defendant is not wrongly held
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 the matter that he has been held account of.
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