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Nowadays many young people are not interested in reading the newspapers and watching new on television. Give reasons for this and proffer solution to this problem.

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There is increasing concern in many countries that newspapers are not being read and the news on television is not being watched by many young people.
As a result
, young people in these countries are not up-to-date with or even concerned about local, national and international events. The major causes of
this
 problem are that most newspapers and news programmes are designed for an adult audience and are not presented in a format that teenagers find attractive. Few young people read newspapers because the language is too difficult and the style and content
is
Suggestion
have been
are being
 usually quite serious. A lack of interest in the news is
also
 due to the fact that young people are fascinated by new technology,
such
 as computers and the Internet.
As a result
 of
this
 there is a lower interest in traditional news formats, which are considered unappealing and unfashionable. There are some strategies that can be used to encourage young people to keep abreast of the news. The
first
 is to have news agencies present the news in formats that are appealing for the young. The easiest way to do
this
 would be to present news on internet sites that are designed for a younger audience. Another way to confront the problem is to have schools involved in the publication of regular school newspapers. Recent local, national and international news events could be included,
although
 schools should
also
 encourage pupils to be involved in the writing of articles and submissions.
This
 newspaper could
then
 be distributed to all the pupils, which means a greater number of young people would regularly read news stories. The low number of young people reading newspapers and following the news on television can be increased by presenting the news in formats that are appealing to them. The key is to utilise websites and
also
 have schools publish their own newspapers, which students are involved in.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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