Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
working people are facing
health
issues as they don'
t
get sufficient
time
for
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to
exercise
during working days.
This
essay will explain the various possible
reason
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reasons
behind not doing
exercise
adequately by working people and will discuss possible solutions. There are various reasons, working people don'
t
find
time
to
doing
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do
exercise
on a daily basis. Working peoples
mostly has
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mostly have
pressure to complete their tasks. They have to
work
extended hours in the office. Their works make them mentally tired.
Also
, they have to travel to different places for their business tours, have to visit client locations. Traffic congestion is
also
another issue that peoples have to spend more
time
while commuting to office and homes.
Furthermore
,
health
is
also
an important aspect of life. If we can'
t
keep our
health
properly, we won'
t
able to
work
efficiently. We might get ill frequently. Not doing proper
exercise
, might have an adverse effect on
health
,
chances
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the chances
of getting overweight. To avoid all these issues, people have to make a daily routine and give proper
time
for
exercise
. People should have to plan the
work
properly to give proper
time
for
exercise
. There are certain companies, having Gym and playgrounds into their
premice
land and the buildings on it
premises
. Employees should use these facilities during their free
time
in the office. Some companies organize sports activities or events, the employees should participate in
such
activities. In conclusion, People should develop
habit
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habits
of doing
exercise
by doing better planning of their
work
. The balance should be maintained between the professional and personal life. The employer should
also
encourage employees to do
exercise
and stay fit.
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