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In some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but in other cases, people choose their own marriage partner. Discuss both systems.

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The idea that a
marriage
 should be arranged by the
parents
 of the couple, or by other
members-of
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 the family, is quite acceptable to some societies, yet completely out of the question for others. It all depends on your cultural expectations. In so-called
western
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 societies, it is very unusual for marriages to be arranged. Most young people would not welcome the idea that their
parents
 have the right to choose their partner for life. They feel that arranged marriages deny them their fundamental right to choose, even if they make a bad decision.
However
, if we are honest about it, we might acknowledge that some
parents
 organise their children's lives in
such
 a way that they are likely to meet and marry partners the
parents
 approve
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 It could be said that
this
 is, to some extent, similar to an arranged
marriage
. It is always better when families support the relationship and welcome the grandchildren. People for whom arranged marriages are the cultural norm often argue that the likelihood of the
marriage
 lasting is greater when it is set up in
this
 manner.
Parents
 can be assured that their children are joining a family of similar standing and cultural background, and
this
, in the long run, makes for a more stable society if your
parents
'
marriage
 was arranged, and has worked well,
then
 why should you question the custom? The important thing to ensure is that people are never forced into a
marriage
 which will make them unhappy or lead to an unequal relationship where one partner is exploited by the other.
This
 applies in all societies and situations.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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