Some people think that children should go to kindergarten before attending Primary School while other believe that it is better for children to stay all day with family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Child care
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Childcare
and parenting has become a matter of great concern over time. The increased trend of sending adolescence to Kindergarten prior to formal education has given rise to heated debate about if a
child
kept in
playschool
develops better or it is better for
young one's
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a young one's
the young one's
to stay completely with family before going for formal schooling. Both views are discussed in
ensuing paragraphs
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the ensuing paragraphs
before reaching to a valid conclusion. Kindergarten
are believed
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is believed
to be beneficial as they
helps
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help
adolescence in developing as an extrovert and confident individuals which helps them at every stage of life. A survey why International
child
development authority reveals that children who had been enrolled for play schools by their parents are more friendly and confident interacting with outsiders and are
considerablly
to a great extent or degree
considerably
more alert and attentive.
In contrast
, growing entirely in closed family environment less friendly and possess
underconfidence
.
Hence
, School boosts personality of children at
very young age
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a very young age
.
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.
However
, who completely rely on Kindergartens might sometime
ends
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end
up risking
psychological development
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the psychological development
of their offsprings
.
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.
As a
child
's is very sensitive
,
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,
as
such
any negative experience main cause lifelong damage to the personality of young ones. Delhi
,
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,
for instance
, reported many instances where School children are being threatened turn up badly by the faculty members. Owing to
such
incidences, Aashiq your family environment is considered batch suitable for adolescents. As families
not only take
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doesn't only take
care of proper food habits of
children but
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children, but
also
prevent them from bad experiences affecting their mental growth as a
child
.
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.
In my opinion, our family environment
provide
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provides
old habitation to
children but
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children, but
a
child
is kept segregated family will difficult to interact with people outside
family
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the family
and develops as introvert individual.
Hence
, in order to enable a
child
to learn developing socially and mentally at young age Play Schools are good alternatives.
How ever
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However
, parents must keep vigilant watch over the daily routine activities of Play Schools and any change in
child's behaviour
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the child's behaviour
must be
careful
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carefully
observed in order to enable the
child
develop
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to develop
as healthy individual
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as a healthy individual
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
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