It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional culture are incompatible to what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Technology

and Traditional

culture

are both

diffreant

unlike in nature or quality or form or degree

different

things.

Technology

is generally useful to

devlop

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

personality not

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personality, not

their

culture

, but it helps not only to understand others

culture

but

also

preserve them.

Firstly

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Firstly, technology

technology

connected people from

diffreant

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different cultures

different culture

a different culture

culture

which

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Which

introduce them to interact and learn their values

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thoughts

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routines and more on.

Secondly

Due to the

incerased

made greater in size or amount or degree

increased

use of

technology globalization

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technology, globalization

also

increased its gives lots of

opportunites

a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances

opportunities

to human being

such

as jobs

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business markets in world wide

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However for

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However, for

settel

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settling

settle

in other cities and countries they learn their

culture

an accept

too but

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too, but

still they follow their own nations

culure

readily apparent to the mind

clear

that is

the very

good

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best

thing.

For example

In India People are

gone

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going

verious

of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity

various

countries for jog

purpose but

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purpose, but

thet

pointing out something

that

they

the

follow their

indian

a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived

Indian

culture

such

as Pujas, Diwali female gave

prefrance

a strong liking

preference

preferences

to ware saree and

mens

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Mens

men

ware Kutras and Payjamas.

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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional culture are incompatible to what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Fully explain your ideas

Supermarkets should only sell food produced within their own country. What are your opinions about it?

In some pleces old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.