It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional culture are incompatible to what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Technology
and Traditional
culture
are both
diffreant
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
things.
Technology
is generally useful to
devlop
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
personality not
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personality, not
their
culture
, but it helps not only to understand others
culture
but
also
preserve them.
Firstly
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Firstly, technology
technology
connected people from
diffreant
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different cultures
different culture
a different culture
culture
.
which
Suggestion
Which
introduce them to interact and learn their values
,
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,
thoughts
,
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,
routines and more on.
Secondly
Due to the
incerased
made greater in size or amount or degree
increased
use of
technology globalization
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technology, globalization
also
increased its gives lots of
opportunites
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
to human being
such
as jobs
,
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,
business markets in world wide
.
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.
However for
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However, for
settel
Suggestion
settling
settle
in other cities and countries they learn their
culture
an accept
too but
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too, but
still they follow their own nations
culure
readily apparent to the mind
clear
that is
the very
good
Suggestion
best
thing.
For example
In India People are
gone
Suggestion
going
verious
of many different kinds purposefully arranged but lacking any uniformity
various
countries for jog
purpose but
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purpose, but
thet
pointing out something
that
they
the
follow their
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
culture
such
as Pujas, Diwali female gave
prefrance
a strong liking
preference
preferences
to ware saree and
mens
Suggestion
Mens
men
ware Kutras and Payjamas.
Moreon
Suggestion
More on
Internet Helps to Preserve Verious
Culture
, some old cultures which are going to rare now people gets information about them on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
and they
given
Suggestion
are given
have given
gave
to their
next
genaration
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generation
generations
. In other side some people misuse the
technology
.
Their
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There
are
fever
(comparative of 'few' used with count nouns) quantifier meaning a smaller number of
fewer
people who
not follow
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don't follow
aren't following
their
tradition
.
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.
Some group says that
traditions cultures
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traditions, cultures
will
lost
Suggestion
lose
due to the
highre
advanced in complexity or elaboration
higher
high re
use of
technology
,
this
is
little bit
Suggestion
a little bit
true for some humans.
such
Suggestion
Such
as some people
dont
do not
don't
like to follow their own
culture
they attracts to
others
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others, then
then
thye
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the
stars to
avoide
stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something
avoid
evade
their own
culturs some
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cultures, some
cultures some
culture's some
culture some
of them spend most of time on computers, mobiles and
inernets
a restricted computer network; a private network created using World Wide Web software
intranets
they become
lazyer
moving slowly and gently
lazier
looser
and forget the happiness of celebrating
fastivals
a day or period of time set aside for feasting and celebration
festivals
they think its only wastage of money ant time. To conclude
,
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,
I am the
persone
a human being
person
who uses
technology
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technology, then
then
still loves to follow
culture
and respect
o
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
to
our
tradition
.
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.
That means
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am
dis
denotes a person or thing
this
agreee
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
agrees
agreed
with the statement
.
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.
Technology
does not affect the
tradition
its all
depents
be contingent upon (something that is elided)
depends
on the human mind.
Internet
Suggestion
The internet
will save our
tradition
and helps to our
next
genarations
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generations
generation
.
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