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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other sorts of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In Todays World, Economic
growth
 is one of the major aspect
for
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of
 the ministry to develop their
country
.
Therefore
, Many regimes
opines
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opine
 that the most important goals
is
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are
 economic
growth
 of a nation.
However
, some
individiuals
a human being
individuals
 have claimed that
country
's
growth
 in various other aspects
are
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is
 equally important.
Further
, In
this
 essay we will discuss few reasons.
Firstly
, It is true that
government
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the government
think
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thinks
 that the most important aspect
for
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of
 a
country
 is a economic progress, as economic rise can
leads
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lead
 to various things like promotion of several multinational companies, development in areas and regions of a
country
.
In addition
, They consider it as a number one priority to match their goal
acheivements
the action of accomplishing something
achievements
achievement
. Budgetary progress leads to an immediate expansion
for
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in
of
 the rural areas and in several new technologies.
Furthermore
, Economic
growth
 can make the ministry to take new policy into consideration for employment for the individuals in a
country
.
Moreover
, Without economic development a
country
 cannot fight with external and internal affairs that affecting the nation. An ministry has to take
sevaral
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
 decisions for the people's
overwhelming in
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overwhelming, in
 which high economy can make them more
conveinient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 to take the measures.
As a result
, fiscal improvement is one of the
thing
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things
 which cannot be denied.
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Poverty
Secondl
y, monetary poverty
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educational, social
educational social
 ecducat
ional social values en
Accept comma addition
environment, traditions
vironment traditions peace in the nation
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