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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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There is absolutely no doubt about the health threats
consumption
 of
tobacco
 poses to smokers. There are divergent views as to whether
banning
Suggestion
the banning
 of smoking in public places is the right decision or not. While there are some concerns about the health risks
consumption
 of
tobacco
 causes, I disagree that the use in public places should be prohibited.
To begin
 with, a restriction on public
consumption
 of cigarette would have a negative effect on the profitability of the manufacturers and
government
Suggestion
the government
. Production as a whole is a capital intensive business and investors would have put in a lot of money to set up the businesses. The investors deserve a return on their investments. The less profitable these businesses are, the taxes they are able to pay to the
government
 at the end of every year.
Also
,
tobacco
 is highly taxed in most jurisdictions and a ban on the public
consumption
 would likely reduce
consumption which
Accept comma addition
consumption, which
 would
then
 reduce
government
 revenue from sales tax.
In addition
, the cost of compliance to new laws is usually very expensive. The regulators would need to embark on some
infrastructural
 development that would help them with monitoring compliance and successful conviction of offenders. The
government
 would probably have to set up a court to attend to cases of noncompliance. These would likely be funded using taxpayers money that could be utilized for
more critical
Suggestion
most critical
 aspects of the economy
such
 as education and transportation. In conclusion,
although
tobacco
 is considered to be a leading cause of cancer for consumers and people around them, a ban on public
consumption
 would be detrimental to the economy as a whole. Not only would it reduce authorities’ revenue, compliance would
also
 come at a huge cost.
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