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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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There is absolutely no doubt about the health threats
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 of
tobacco
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 poses to smokers. There are divergent views as to whether
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the banning
 of smoking in public places is the right decision or not. While there are some concerns about the health risks
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 of
tobacco
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 causes, I disagree that the use in public places should be prohibited.
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 with, a restriction on public
consumption
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 of cigarette would have a negative effect on the profitability of the manufacturers and
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government
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the government
. Production as a whole is a capital intensive business and investors would have put in a lot of money to set up the businesses. The investors deserve a return on their investments. The less profitable these businesses are, the taxes they are able to pay to the
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 at the end of every year.
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,
tobacco
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 is highly taxed in most jurisdictions and a ban on the public
consumption
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 would likely reduce
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consumption which
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consumption, which
 would
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 reduce
government
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 revenue from sales tax.
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, the cost of compliance to new laws is usually very expensive. The regulators would need to embark on some
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 development that would help them with monitoring compliance and successful conviction of offenders. The
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 would probably have to set up a court to attend to cases of noncompliance. These would likely be funded using taxpayers money that could be utilized for
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most critical
 aspects of the economy
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 as education and transportation. In conclusion,
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tobacco
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 is considered to be a leading cause of cancer for consumers and people around them, a ban on public
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 would be detrimental to the economy as a whole. Not only would it reduce authorities’ revenue, compliance would
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 come at a huge cost.
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