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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, Most of the countries are providing free medical for the people.
Eventhough
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Even though
, they may not be
covering
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covered
, all the diseases, especially expensive ones. We will discuss in detail, in the later part of the story. Coming to the free treatment, At present, health facilities became costlier and can'
t
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 be
effortable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
 by
an
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a
 common man. In
this
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 situation, free provision of them made the people, relax. It cover's, more common and less expense problems like fever, cough, cold. They may not only be
seasonal but
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seasonal, but
also
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 viral infections. It
also
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 covers, critical situation like
pregrancy
the state of being pregnant; the period from conception to birth when a woman carries a developing fetus in her uterus
pregnancy
.
This
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 situation is important for most of the poor. Many, have lost their lives, at
time
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the time
 of delivery due to poverty. Related to expensive health issue coverage, The government, can'
t
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affort
be able to spare or give up
afford
 for their people to provide those facilities for free to all. There may be lots many of reasons. Maybe because of less financial standards of the state.
For example
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, for the under developed states, can'
t
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 invest its revenue only on hospital's. Another, Very rare cases, The one which is not known or chances of
occuring
the act of acquiring something
acquiring
 them is very less, they are not going to cover in their insurance. To conclude, I agree with the statement. We can'
t
Use synonyms
 expect each and everything from the ruling party, without any payment.
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