Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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Many opine that the major way to be excited in
life
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is to be prosperous.
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Despite
being wealthy is
one
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of the prerequisites for enjoying
life
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since it enables
one
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afford all his or her needs and as well as take proper care of his or her family, I believe
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one's
children and being in the presence of friends can
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bring
happiness
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. Being rich has been proven to give joy, seeing that
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can be able to acquire all his or her
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necessities in order to have a great
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.
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, it gives
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a sense of security so, puts off worry.
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,
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the children
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stand
to have quality education if their parents or guardian
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is
well to do.
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, the 2017 Student's Educational Research proved that students tend to drop out of school when their parents are not wealthy.
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, having a lot of money sure is a form through which
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gains
happiness
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. Asides the obvious fact that being rich can make folks joyous, there are other factors that
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do
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.
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of which is being in the mist of
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love
ones,
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,
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good
friends.
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can never underestimate the power of love, which has every time shown to have the ability to gladden the heart.
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, the presence of children has high chances of bringing smiles to
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's face.
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notices himself or herself consciously or unconsciously smiling not remembering the pains of
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just by
starring
(used of eyes) open and fixed as if in fear or wonder
staring
at the young ones.
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, a survey conducted
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with
couples shows that 80% admits that though not rich yet are satisfied with having their children around.
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, friends and children are sources of
happiness
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and joy. In conclusion, even though many people say riches is what
makes
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makes one happy
one
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happy in
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, I am of the view that
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it enables
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afford all his or her wants and aids to properly cater for
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's children, there are other ways to achieve
happiness
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which is through having children and having good friends around.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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