Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Many opine that the major way to be excited in
life
is to be prosperous.
Although
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Despite
being wealthy is
one
of the prerequisites for enjoying
life
since it enables
one
afford all his or her needs and as well as take proper care of his or her family, I believe
ones
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one's
children and being in the presence of friends can
also
bring
happiness
. Being rich has been proven to give joy, seeing that
one
can be able to acquire all his or her
life
necessities in order to have a great
life
.
Besides
, it gives
one
a sense of security so, puts off worry.
Moreover
,
children
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the children
stands
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stand
to have quality education if their parents or guardian
are
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is
well to do.
For example
, the 2017 Student's Educational Research proved that students tend to drop out of school when their parents are not wealthy.
Consequently
, having a lot of money sure is a form through which
one
gains
happiness
. Asides the obvious fact that being rich can make folks joyous, there are other factors that
does
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do
this
.
One
of which is being in the mist of
loved
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love
ones,
that is
,
goods
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good
friends.
One
can never underestimate the power of love, which has every time shown to have the ability to gladden the heart.
Secondly
, the presence of children has high chances of bringing smiles to
one
's face.
One
notices himself or herself consciously or unconsciously smiling not remembering the pains of
life
just by
starring
(used of eyes) open and fixed as if in fear or wonder
staring
at the young ones.
For example
, a survey conducted
on
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with
couples shows that 80% admits that though not rich yet are satisfied with having their children around.
Thus
, friends and children are sources of
happiness
and joy. In conclusion, even though many people say riches is what
makes
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makes one happy
one
happy in
life
, I am of the view that
although
it enables
one
afford all his or her wants and aids to properly cater for
one
's children, there are other ways to achieve
happiness
which is through having children and having good friends around.
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