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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
earning
Suggestion
the earning
the earnings
 of a person totally depends on his talent. Those who are more
intellegent
having the capacity for thought and reason especially to a high degree
intelligent
 earns more than the rest, In most of the countries. Some are
aganist
in contact with
against
 to it and while others support the thought. We will discuss on both the views in the later part. Coming to high paid personalities. At present, earning of an individual totally depends on his knowledge. It has his own advantages and disadvantages. Considering the pros, it not only helps the individual to enhance their stuff, but
also
 encourage others to do the same.
For
example
, If a person got
high paid job
Suggestion
a high paid job
the high paid job
high paid jobs
,
then
 others tend to follow him, by learning the same technology.
On the other hand
, there may be changes of one paid the large sum and creating a dependency on him.
For
example
, Companies tend to pay more salaries to their employees, if they feel that they are important. In
this
 situation, employee
create
Suggestion
creates
an
Suggestion
a
 dependency on them, by not sharing the information, what they have. Regarding the other view of the government restrictions. Even
this
 has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own Postivites and negative
angels
the space between two lines or planes that intersect; the inclination of one line to another; measured in degrees or radians
angles
. Positive side of
this
 decision is that it will create
an
Suggestion
a
 healthy
competion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
.
For
example
, Price of
an
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a
comodity
articles of commerce
commodity
 increase as the expenditure like salaries, investment of
an
Suggestion
a
 company rises.
will
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Will
 not encourage their citizens to earn according to wish in
an
Suggestion
a
 legal way.
For
example
, if
an
Suggestion
a
 resource has
capability
Suggestion
the capability
 to earn more than the restricted amount and company is ready to pay the desired amount,
then
 it should be welcome else there may be chances of loosing him to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 nation. To conclude, in my opinion, considering the above points, I support for no restrictions on the wages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
  • social unrest
  • innovate
  • government intervention
  • salary cap
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