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Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#education #university #government #students
It is often argued that tuition fees for
education
 ranging from pre-school to going to college should be sponsored by the government. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the above statement, as it will not only
gived
cause to have, in the abstract sense or physical sense
give
 a person an equal right
for
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to
education
 but will
also
 lead to a better generation and lifestyle.
First
 of all, receiving an
education
 is one the most essential human rights to be provided for an individual.
In other words
, a person is entitled
for
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to
 receiving a decent
education
 regardless his financial status.
As a result
, all
children whether
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children, whether
 they come from low-
icome
the financial gain (earned or unearned) accruing over a given period of time
income
 families or from wealthy families will have equal and similar opportunities towards their careers and future lifestyle. For
examplem
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
 a person should not be judged by his financial problems,
however he
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however, he
 should be seen based on his qualifications and
education
 that he received equally as a child from the upper level society.
Second
 of all,
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 providing funds for studying to their current and upcoming generation will
definetely
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 lead
for
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to
 a better workforce and an upgraded
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. To state
this
 thesis in other terms, having educated individuals will gradually increase the quality of
life
 in a society, where crime rate will surely decrease enormously.
For instance
, a recent study showed that
neighborhoods
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhoods
 with well-schooled population have 30% less murder and theft cases comparing
to
being one more than one
two
 low-educated
neighborhoods
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhoods
. In conclusion, I believe that it is more
benefecial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 for
both both
two things or people together
both
 individuals and the society for the
governnement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 to sponsor tuition feels of schools and colleges, leading to a better future in regards to
life
 paths and quality of
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic background
  • equitable society
  • government-funded
  • higher quality standards
  • financial limitations
  • inefficiencies
  • wasteful spending
  • cost-effective
  • innovate
  • undervaluing
  • dropout rates
  • financial burden
  • well-being
  • higher education uptake
  • increased taxes
  • reallocation
  • vital sectors
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