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People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. what are the causes of this problem? How lo overcome il?

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An incredible amount of energy has been spent chasing the ideal
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life
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, but most
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 fail to achieve it.
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 suggest ways to overpower
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 problem. The first reason for the inability to achieve a
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 is the technology of today. we are more reachable than ever in the past.
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 has gone global, and competition has gone stiffer. The
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 has thinned the line between personal and professional lives. The second blame goes to the materialistic society of today.
People
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 want to avail all the luxuries of
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, and in that quest they become workaholics and
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 that attitude becomes a way of
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 because the desires go on increasing and increasing.
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,
people
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 cannot achieve a
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 because the definition of a
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life
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 is different for different
people
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People
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 weave together their personal
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 with their professional
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 to get the best of
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. What works for one person may not
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 for another. Making choices is what the
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 between
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 and
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 is all about. There may be times when the choice between moving ahead with your career takes a back seat to your health or happiness at home. The priorities you
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 as important keep changing and
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 why achieving a perfect
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balance
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 is difficult. The solutions are not simple. we must try to introspect and see what makes us happy and
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 set priorities in
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. When we come home from
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, we must learn to switch the office button off. Another key is adopting some flexibility. lt never works if we are too rigid with the goals we set for ourselves.
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 but not least, there is a beautiful term, 'downshifting', which means we should learn when enough is enough and
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 we all begin to enjoy
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 in its true form.
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 is perceived in a different light by us all, and so achieving a perfect
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: The equilibrium between personal life and career work.
  • Burnout: Physical or mental collapse caused by overwork or stress.
  • Time management: The process of organizing and planning how to divide your time between different activities.
  • Financial pressures: Economic demands that might force someone to prioritize work over personal life.
  • Overcommitting: Taking on more responsibilities than one can handle.
  • Technological advancements: Innovations in technology that make it easier to stay connected to work outside of office hours.
  • Societal expectations: Cultural norms and beliefs that influence people's behavior and decisions.
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