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The qualities a person needs to become truly successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that universities and every other learning
environment lack
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environment, lack
 what it takes to pass on
attributes
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the attributes
 every individual should have before they will undoubtedly be seen as successful in recent years. I agree that some institutions,
such
 as the polytechnics, might not be able to equip people with managerial skills that are needed in life but refuse that universities cannot position people for a successful life. Polytechnics focus only on vocational studies, thereby relegating the need for managerial skills. Being exposed to
such
 academic environments, students might assume that everyone has to be skilled - whether or not they can manage a business.
This
 process is knowledge biased.
For example
, a professor of medical laboratory science could not run a simple business. After several interviews, he admitted being a product of a polytechnic. Clearly, he was not taught how to.
On the other hand
, universities are all encompassing in terms of coursework and curriculum content. Not only do they teach people the rudiments of every discipline, field works and techniques of nurturing an idea into reality are all part of what everyone learns there. Students lead
sessions
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the sessions
, which all come from both vocational and nonvocational studies.
In other words
, the university is a complete world. In conclusion, while the polytechnics are not complete in what they prepare students with, universities offer so much that when acquired, people start living
to
Suggestion
with
 whatever is expected of them.
Hence
, they are seen as successful in the world.
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