Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?

It is irrefutable that government has
number
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of tasks to perform to protect different types of
species
including humans. Excess care and more than the requirement of
resources
are being deployed to protect wild animals and
birds
is
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said
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some people. In my opinion, I agree and believe that we should focus more on humans as
resources
are limited. One reason is that we have many more serious challenges to cover
such
as
safety
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the safety
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of humans rather than focusing on
birds
and wild animals. Poverty and lack of medicines against deadly infections are the major issues of the current
world
,
therefore
the government must allocate more funds on
such
issues to control the deaths of human
being
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beings
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.
For instance
, a survey from
World
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the World
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health organization
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Health Organization
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revealed that every day uncounted people are dying because of poor living conditions and
lack
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of medicines to cure
from
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fatal diseases like cancer and HIV. Another reason is that
extinction
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of one
species
from the
world
has
limited
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a limited
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effect on other
species
and the environment,
thus
spending huge money and other
resources
to protect these
species
is unjustified.
For example
,
disappearance
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the disappearance
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of
species
dodo
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birds
from
Malaysian
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a Malaysian
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island has zero effect on other
species
on that island.
Hence
, it is a wasteful approach to appoint numerous scientists
on
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the behaviour and study of
such
species
. In conclusion, human problems are more serious to cover and
resources
are little in quantity.
However
,
vanishing
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the vanishing
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of wild animals and
birds
is not
effecting
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affecting
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to
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this
world
at major levels,
therefore
, we should not give more focus and
resources
on
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to
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such
issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • species extinction
  • wildlife conservation
  • sustainable development
  • ecosystem services
  • habitat destruction
  • endangered species
  • conservation efforts
  • natural heritage
  • human encroachment
  • poaching
  • genetic diversity
  • climate change
  • environmental stewardship
  • protection measures
  • wildlife sanctuary
  • biological significance
  • conservation biology
  • environmental advocacy
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