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Many educators believe that international exchange trips are beneficial for students. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion

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In recent times,
student
 exchange
program
have sparked
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has sparked
 heated debates about whether it is invaluable for the students to take
international exchange trip
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an international exchange trip
international exchange trips
. In
this
 essay,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 shall argue that
such
program
 is
indispensible
not to be dispensed with; essential
indispensable
 and that students receive confidence and international exposure benefits through having international
program
.
To begin
 with, many teachers and parents believe that there are plethora advantages by taking
such
 step in life.
Firstly
,
student
 exchange
program
 force
student
 to leave their comfort zone and shift to foreign territory which is totally unknown to them.
This
 will help to cultivate hidden talent and leadership skills. They will learn to adapt unfamiliar surrounding and living conditions and
this
 fight make them bold and
confidence
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confident
. Elaborating
further
, students will get international
exposure which
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exposure, which
 means they will get a chance to study and work with people of different culture and background.
This
 is because, in international
student
program students
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program, students
 come from all over
globe
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the globe
 and study under one roof. As evidence, a report was presented by
international
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the international student bureau
student
 bureau showing that more than average number of
student
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students
 preferring international
program
 for their future studies.
Thus it
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Thus, it
 improves the overall personality of
student
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the student
students
. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the notion that international
program
improve
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improves
 confidence to fight with society and life. In the future, we will certainly see that all teachers and parents will encourage their students and children to take
such
 step.
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